I think this is a fitting way to write how Naraku died. I would imagine Sesshoumaru could not go unscathed in such a battle. Quite a few good players in the original plot died. Not only does this simplify maintaining how many characters you have to include in dialogue, but you will be able to focus on the plot.

You have done a good job maintaing the personalities of each character. I like the inclusion of Rin in this piece. I also like the side thoughts that Sesshoumaru has made in his analysis of Kagome.

Author's Response:

Thank you very much, this is my first attempt at writing anything for other people to read in about 11 years. I have tried very hard to keep the characters canon.

Several of the main players had to go as I am doing this as a continuation of the anime, because I haven't been satisfied with where the manga has taken it, and in order for things to go as I wanted there needed to be a reduction of players, don't worry there will be more action as it progresses.

 ~*Luce*~