Membership status: Member
Bio:
I’m a late comer to the anime genre. I was introduced about six months ago when a friend lent me the first three seasons of Inuyasha. I was hooked and after devouring the entire series I then switched to the manga. After catching up to the current chapter I wanted more and began searching out other anime and manga to keep the beast sated.
I began reading fan-fiction and after having done a review for a woman, I was contacted by her. She ever so politely demanded that I write something, anything, so she could read it and thus was the driving force behind “Kyoudai no Meiyo”. I, at the time, had little ambition to write a fan-fic but, she talked me into it, and so thank you taskmaster Elegantpaws, I don’t know what I’d do without you lashing me with the proverbial wet noodle.
I’m twenty-five, married, with three kids, ages four, two, and almost 1 year. If my updates are late, I blame the kids. I do try to update weekly but, well life happens.
"Aerodynamically, the bumble bee shouldn't be able to fly, but the bumble bee doesn't know it so it goes on flying anyway."~Mary Kay Ash
Categories: General, Adult
Characters: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 16091 Read Count: 2936
Date: 07 Aug 2007 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I like this story very much. The plot is sufficiently original, and the characterizations believable.
There were several sticky spots that could use cleaning up, some tongue tripping sentences and misused words, that distracted from the tale. For example in chapter one.
"Both males were not happy to be touching each other, but considering Miroku’s mortal stamina could only last so long running, and Kagome had sought another form of transportation, no other solution could be remedied."
The section "but considering Miroku's mortal stamina could only last so long running", is very tongue tripping and hard to understand without pausing for a moment, and the word "remedied" is misused in the format of the sentance.
All in all it was a good read, and the point was gotten throughout. I look forward to reading future works.
~*Luce*~