Very good!  Again, it's dialogue-heavy, but the dialogue does not feel forced, and comes off as necessary to the chapter (and that's kind of hard to pull off well), but you did it! 

As far as Sesshomaru goes, he does seem a bit out of character, but that's okay...as obviously, he needed to seem a bit out of character to fit the story properly.  What matters is that he still feels like Sesshomaru, and he does.  Great job there, too!

Again, the "next" button is calling me.  Another ten!

This chapter was great!  I think your death-bed proposal came out better than mine did!  Seriously, great job!  Shippou referring to Inuyasha and Kagome as "Mama" and "Papa" is very cute, and makes his character seem more "real" than he usually appears. 

Another ten!

Compelling! Must....click...."next"...button....

Author's Response: Lol! Thanks! :D

You should finish this story, as its pretty good!  I also saw that you were considering writing another one...?  If you still are, I say go for it.  You're not bad by any means, and I really enjoyed reading this one!

Author's Response:

Thank you! I appreciate your review. I'll be finishing this one sooner or later. The other story I was planning on writing is a modern one with Sesshomaru and I'm not so sure about it. Once again, thank you for your opinion

I did like I said.  :-) 

Anyway, on the the review...  I really enjoy your writing style, and although I'm not personally 'into' Rin/Sess stories, I thoroughly enjoyed the writing quality shown here.  Keep it up!

-Dark_Author

You get a ten for the great writing and for being so compliant. :-)

Huh, I left a review for this...I guess it didn't take the first time.  No worries, though. I can write another one.

 Anyway, this was really cute.  I feel so bad for Inuyasha and Kagome...they're in for 18 years of hell.  Just the short trip through the well to visit Grandma and Uncle Souta is going to be like a mountaineering expedition!

This is off to a great start!  I really like it, and I intend to keep up with its progress.  However, you asked for contructive criticism, so here it goes:  I think the bit about Inuyasha's past with Kikyo could have been longer and more detailed...instead of briefly summerized, especially if it is important to the story.  

Other than that, its great!  Wonderful job on your first AU fic, you're off to a great start!

Wow!  This is the first fic I've ever seen that uses Kirara's perspective.  I'd really like to see how this goes...you're right, its very unique.  Great job!

Good first chapter!  This is off to a great start.

The dialogue was formatted better in chapter when compared to the first.  You seem to have a decent idea for a story, but I would really like to see more detail.  I don't have a very clear image of the setting or the custom characters, and it is hard to sympathize with a character you don't know all too well.  However, I like it, and I would like to see chapter three when its up.

Author's Response: I know what you mean i'm not the best when it comes to details, but i'm going to try to add more detail in the next chapters